|Reviews for 365 Days|
| DecayedDreams chapter 1 . 11/3/2011
I don't have too much complaints for you, but I do agree with Ritsuioko23 about being a bit more descriptive. But I think it's okay for this chapter because it is a prologue.
Just a suggestion for you, type out your numbers so your work looks more professional, such as seventeen years old.
This Feb. 29 2007 should have a comma so it becomes Feb. 19, 2007.
One thing I would do next time before posting is read your work out loud and see if it flows. Your grammar is correct but sounds awkward and it could always be better.
When I read your summary I loved your idea it actually reminds me of Death Game Park (a cellphone drama) you might get some ideas from that. I'm looking forward to hearing more from you.
| Ritsuioko23 chapter 1 . 11/1/2011
Pretty good for a first chapter. Though you could be a little more descriptive in your writing.