|Reviews for New Man|
| med chapter 1 . 5/22/2012
that was beautiful. thank you for sharing
| VarianN chapter 1 . 11/3/2011
I quite like the feel and flow of this. Mechanical in presentation and still emotional in a dry sort of way. You managed one voice throughout the whole piece quite nicely.
There's a fair bit of repetition at the beginning of the piece and I can understand that you might be using it to show the narrator's evolution but if that's the case I suggest a more gradual transition to clearer, less repetitious thoughts. It seemed a bit to abrupt to me.
The mint obsession is rather amusing and I'd have to say you picked a most excellent last line.