Wow, that's great. You were able to get across the feeling of desolation very well.

Sounds cool, crazy old ladys and hostile government conspiracies. If only my neighborhood were this exiting.

Oh, wow! I really liked this. I read the first few lines and I didn't really get it, but after I read the whole thing (and my brain took it's good ol' time on putting it together), I really got it. It's so normal, it's FRIGHTENING! I loved this!

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Despite the fat that this story was submitted about a year and a half ago, I subbose every story deserves a review; yours was just a bit late in coming. This is a nice poem, slightly confusing but then again that's what poems ARE. Really quite good. If you are still a so-called 'active member' would you read and review some of my things?