|Reviews for Retrospect|
| The Autumn Queen chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
I like the shortness of this because it really paints a beautiful image without getting bogged down with things on the outside. It's like you've drawn a circle around the single scene/event and everything outside is inconsequential.
The only thing I don't like is the second comma in the first sentence because the transition of action seems a little hasty there. I'd prefer using connecting verse, ie. "...and lying sprawled on..."
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| Dragon made me do it chapter 1 . 11/8/2011
how appropriate that I am reading this during a thunderstorm ... using my computer...in my bedroom next to a giant tree...but shh about that...
Lovely, and great that you came to this from the prompt.
I like the way it you indirectly reveal information, like '35 feet away, there's a branch ...' tells us just how old and magnificent this tree must have been.
Nice title too, kind of painful irony.
| deatheaten chapter 1 . 11/7/2011
This was so beautiful. I loved how you pictured the tree falling down. And the last line was fantastic. Really good one. :)