Reviews for I Promise
Meadow Frost chapter 1 . 2/18/2012
Beautiful poem, love the lines where you say, "Overuse the words I love you." Wonderfully done.
BookcraZzaY chapter 1 . 11/15/2011
Loved this poem ;)
EnovyGod chapter 1 . 11/10/2011
This poem has good intentions, but is confusing. The lines are broken up in stanzas with quotation marks, but the stanzas really don't need to be broken up in this way. Spaces help, or you could just leave the poem be and let the reader choose to split it up in their own way. The line "It'll be easy like the rise of the sun/For me" breaks up the flow of the poem because of the break in the line. Maybe try to bring the lines together and make them longer, as the poem seems to stutter stop throughout. I do like the repetition of the line "Overuse the words I Love You", but you should have used the quotation marks around the "I Love You" portion. That is where it would work better. Thanks for writing!