Reviews for Masses Of Betrayal
inkandhue chapter 1 . 9/17/2012
"For the path to happiness is a battle of temptation."

Loved this line!
The Dead Bard chapter 1 . 2/24/2012
Each line by themselves were awesomely creative, the words painting vivid pictures. The pictures created immediate emotion, and the emotions giving cognitive understanding of what your trying to get at.

All the lines *together* (I feel) did not quite do each other justice. They did not all seem to follow the same thesis, the same flow. I wasn't able to get an over all picture of the whole poem because a few lines in, between "The tree of equilibrium..." and "The fruits of damnation..." I was a little at lost at what the poem was about. Which is a bit of a shame because after rereading it I think I sort of get the theme, and I think over all it's a really cool poem.