|Reviews for My Best Friends Brother|
| Tara Ellis chapter 1 . 3/4/2013
Hi! This is really good, I like the way it's going and you're clearly a talented author. You write really well, I'd just suggest that maybe you set up your setting a little better. Anyway, this is really good so keep on writing! :D
| Patrick chapter 1 . 2/21/2013
Hi there, Nini! I think the best thing you were able to do with this first chapter was also what you intended. Each scene builds to what happens in Chapter Two, I'm pretty sure. Jazmine meets her brother's best friend, Alex, and falls in love, eventually. Great job so far! That's my summary, in brief. I will read Chapter 2 when I get time.
| is wis chapter 10 . 2/19/2013
I haven't actually been commenting for the last past entries, 'cause i was really captivated in this story.
| IS WIS chapter 1 . 2/19/2013
I've actually read this before, but i'm reading again cause, it's an awesome storyline, you've just got yourself a fictionpress fan!
| pandachick97 chapter 11 . 2/18/2013
| BrownEyedCutie99 chapter 11 . 2/18/2013
I knew something bad was going to happen! That was only because Jasmine was all worried, though. I can't wait to see what happens next!
| IS WISnot real chapter 11 . 2/18/2013
WHAT THE HELL!
SAVE ANGIE PLEASE!
BETTER STILL, GET ALEX NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWW WWW!
MUST STOP HURTING EXCLAMATION MARK BUTTON!
BUT FEELS SO GREAT, THOUGH!
I'm not weirdo by the way! ;)
| Naomi Burhoe chapter 10 . 2/15/2013
Okay, suttle is actually spelled subtle. And maybe, you could have Alex move in with Justin for awhile and wait until his mom lets him follow his dream. Then he moves back. During that time he could try to draw Angie's attention and maybe start to date her. Justin becomes a sweetie and apologizes to Blake for the punch and Jazmine decides to give him another go. Jessica turns out to be a nice girl and helps Jazmine. or you could unite Blake and Jazmine
| BrownEyedCutie99 chapter 10 . 2/15/2013
Wow! Can I say drama? Jazmine has 2 boys fighting for her, I'm pretty sure that Angie is going to get hit on by some creep that handed her a card, and Alex just might be going to face the world on his own. Keep on writing!
| Anon chapter 9 . 1/23/2013
ommggg finish it its soo good
| The Prince of Comedy chapter 9 . 8/2/2012
Hey! Sorry it took so long for me to review!
Now, I'm not really good at constructive feedback, so I'll just say what's on my mind when reading your story.
1. Some spelling errors in different chapters. Spellchecking is always your friend.
2. Things seems to move a LITTLE fast at some points.
3. The dialogue (well, to me) doesn't seem natural at some parts, as well as (again, just me) some paragraphs explaining the situation.
But, as for the plot and story wise, this looks like a good story. I hope my feedback wasn't a little harsh, I'm just trying to make you better at what you love to do. :)
Keep up the good writing! And I'll try to update my story as soon as I can! :D
| naomi.burhoe chapter 9 . 8/2/2012
poor blake, but then again thats what happens when jealousy takes over rational thought, love the story, u should totally continue it :)
| naomi.burhoe chapter 8 . 8/2/2012
love it but u may want to check ur spelling, its a little off
| naomi.burhoe chapter 7 . 8/2/2012
still going strong but was Jazmine's name spelling changed from one chapter to the next?
| naomi.burhoe chapter 6 . 8/2/2012
still going strong, though you may want to see about changing pricings to piercings. i think thats what u mean