|Reviews for White Veil Occasion|
| lethalromanticgirl chapter 1 . 11/28/2011
This was amazing. I like how even though it was based on the song you didnt put in or write every sentence like a lyric. Unlike anything I have read before and you should make another version. This was just perfect! :D
| Paralove chapter 1 . 11/26/2011
I loved this, a real Hollywood type moment and well written too :)
| Sayaxchihiya chapter 1 . 11/25/2011
This was really good! When I heard "based on a Taylor Swift song", I didn't have really high expectations, but I really liked this.
Personally, I think this is based too heavily on the song. I know in the song, she compares the dress to a cupcake and you pretty much do the same thing in your story. You're kind of walking the line between tribute and copying, and I personally would change that bit to make sure no one accuses you of stealing.
Also, you shifted tenses about halfway through starting with the line "So I hide in the back." No biggie, but it's a little technical error that can be fixed.
Also, this may just be me, but I don't really like the details of the main character (like saying she has red hair, green eyes, and her name is Ella). I thin it would be better to not describe the main character or the groom and to let the reader fill that in on their own, that way they would feel more into the story, but it's your call.
Good job overall. It was cute, sweet, and funny.