Very nice jobe. Very nice, indeed. But it is in need of some grammar corrections. I don't mean to sound like I am being prissy and all, but I am a complete neat freak.

This story is really good... I think a couple of spelling errors but really good. Please continue and update soon

Keep going please

I thought this was going to be pretty straight forward, but this whole thing with Raven is making it more interesting.

When you swap from one characters perspective to another's, may I suggest that you put their name at the start of their bit just to make it less confusing.
Also, there's quite a lot of typos. It might be a good idea to get a beta reader. I know it's hard to notice your own mistakes sometimes, but, if you send it to someone else to check it, it make the story easier to understand.

ur always inpresing !GET TYPING GIRL!

hey. im sure you know who this is right? anyway more chapters! comeon, i know you can do better.

OMG WHAT WAS HE HIT WITH? graaah, i soooooo wanna knooooow! lolz

i love your story so far. you have great characters and i absolutely loved how inferno got dirt out from under the blankets. it was funny. this is really good so please dont like give up on it :D