Reviews for The Paladin Part 1
Time Tinker chapter 1 . 7/10/2012
Sorry, but I could not pay attention to description at all, another pet peeve of mine is, 'and this is my story.'

But then again, my writing style changes a lot, so who am I to be a critic?

Try and lure people in with dialogue, or a scene that involves action.

Description was great, excellent even, but you really need to balance it and break it up with dialogue.
AJ2012 chapter 1 . 12/4/2011
This is very good! I like this a lot.

The imagery was fantastic!

Overall; great job!

Can't wait to read more!