|Reviews for How to Corrupt a Winter Wonderland|
| asjsbxcjlbaivcvwc chapter 1 . 1/15/2012
Firstly, I enjoy your writing style. It reminds me of something that I can't quite place.
I like that you didn't leave it with a cheesy happy ending, and the idea of an angel fighting could have been poorly constructed but you really did an excellent job!
Definitely going to check out your other stories:)
| Zane Donovan chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
A Brilliant piece of literature. I have read a few of your stories and am anxiously awaiting more. you say you are fascinated with things such as suffering and death, but you do it in a way that most don't. Most people don't understand that in order to highlight the light and the good things, you must sometimes show the shadows and the bad things. Suffering and sacrifice can be some of a writers most influential tools to bring out beauty and life.
| S.J. Belz chapter 1 . 12/18/2011
A very interesting story. You did a great job with the scenery.
| Explicitly Simple chapter 1 . 12/1/2011
What our Angels would do to' keep us happy and safe. But what happens when our Angels Are gonne? Well we live in the corrupted world of broken fantasy. Love this :)
| Wynnd chapter 1 . 11/29/2011
Excellent! Very intense battle scene and I love the ending. Great balance of light and dark characters. If you ever write a book, consider including at least a portion of this short story. In my opinion, it would make a great nightmare.
Next time, give more of an idea of where the girl is going when she is fleeing from the battle scene. I only spotted one sentence (which I nearly stumbled over) that told me that the child was leaving to stand on a field of snow:
"The girl runs unceasingly into an open field of snow and temporary safety."
Try presenting a little more detail (maybe one or two more sentences) describing the empty, openness of the area. It will build suspense, and the reader will seek an explanation for the suspicion of the child's surroundings, thus making him/her more attentive to the story.
That is all! Again, that was amazing! Keep on writing!