Reviews for Black and Blue
Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 4/22/2012
This was so powerful the emotions and descriptions are so vivid, you can really feel everything. There were so many lines that just took my breath away like,

"It's not as romantic as it sounds, she tells me.

It just hurts."

This was very good, especially since your words flow so gracefully and elegantly that it does seem kind of romantic, and then you remind the reader that it's not.

"Spitting slivers of words that come pre-regretted"

I like the use of the word pre-regretted in this line.

"If you hadn't lost your lust for waking up in the morning."

This is such an elegant way to say that you no longer want to be living.

This was hauntingly beautiful. Definitely a favorite.
electrical moon chapter 1 . 4/16/2012
Wow, this is a great poem! It was beautiful and powerful, and the imagery was great. I loved the rhythm too.