|Reviews for Poems For the Bored of Mind|
| The Autumn Queen chapter 2 . 7/13/2012
I don't particularly like the use of the word "unreadable" because 1) it's too plain and outspoken for the context it's in, 2) it somewhat stands out of the rhythm that follows after, and 3) it doesn't really relate to the concept of darkness and magic. [Expressions veiled] or something like that would work so much better.
I really like how you've got the girl singing at the end because it gives a beautifully innocent image wrought with darker subtelties. While it sounds on the surface a simple little lullaby, there's something breath-halting about it. Something beautifully haunting.
| The Autumn Queen chapter 1 . 7/13/2012
I like the second line because you've added feeling to an object, thereby personifying it so simply and yet so beautifully and uniquely (because I have never heard of branches shivering, despite how basic an idea it seems). Basically, beauty in simplicity.
I don't like the exclamation point in the third last line because to me, that kind of halts the rhythm and I can't see why you would choose to do that there of all places. the pause doesn't really add anything to the poem; all it does really is distract me so it takes a bit away from the poem.
Ohana from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
| Dairi chapter 8 . 7/13/2012
Heey, I thought you said happy/sappy thing next! xD Lol
I liked it though. Keep it up!
| Dairi chapter 7 . 7/9/2012
Eeks, very sad. But nice writing, good job.
| Dairi chapter 6 . 7/9/2012
Awww...really enjoyed this one! Good job.
(..Is it sad that I enjoy some angst-y stuff? xDD ...)
| Dairi chapter 5 . 7/9/2012
I didn't quite understand the present and past tense of this one, but I still liked it, lol.
Sometimes the sad stuffs is good.
| Dairi chapter 4 . 7/9/2012
Cute song, with a little twist at the ending lol. I liked it!
| Dairi chapter 3 . 7/9/2012
Interesting imagery with the leaf one...then turns to dust. Heh, very nice.
| Dairi chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
Aww, nice an' cute. I love poems about snow.
| Zuria Maylin chapter 7 . 5/10/2012
| Zuria Maylin chapter 6 . 4/7/2012
Speechless. It's epical.
| Zuria Maylin chapter 5 . 3/1/2012
OMG, how dare you make me cry in the space of thirty seconds!
I respect copyright, but can I PLEASE have rights to this song? PLEASE? I will do it justice, I swear.
| Zuria Maylin chapter 4 . 2/13/2012
CAN I COPY THIS? TO GIVE TO MY CRUSH?
He'd probably freak out, but whatevs...
| Zuria Maylin chapter 2 . 2/9/2012
This is incredible.
I kinda wondered where Gavi's poem came from...