Reviews for Mine for a Week |
---|
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey! I would like to invite you to join our platform to present a good quality story to our readers! Kindly send me a message if this offer piqued your interest. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hello there! I just wanted to ask when are you updating again? I love the story and I really really want to know what happens with the characters :D So, please update soon! |
![]() ![]() Awesome worth waiting for |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG! So excited for this update. After reading this chapter, I can't wait for what is to come next - hopefully it wont be such a long wait. If it is though, it will be worth it, just like this one was! Keep it up, you are doing a wonderful job. |
![]() ![]() Please update waiting |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really, really like this story's plot, the very idea of it, but the grammar, tense, and possession noun mistakes are driving the grammar nazi in me batty. Do you have a beta reader? If not, and you're willing to have me do so, I would love to beta read your story for you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Can't wait for the next chapter |
![]() ![]() Scarlet and blakes pov with a litle bit of sean s. My favriote story ever. I m litraly in love with you. |
![]() ![]() Continue story |
![]() ![]() ![]() HAHAHAAAA Cadie is sooo cool! please update soon! :D LOL |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww:) haha Scarlet and Blake make me die laughing:) and is it an over night(s) field trip? Where are they going? And is Cadies master plan to get them together? I hope so!:) and haha I like how Scar doesn't mind that Cadie is with Sean now too:) it's too cute:) I love your story:) I'm on summer break currently and nine of the others make me feel as happy after reading them like this:) please continue;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was so so good:) I love them two together and Cadie is almost as secretive as blake:) and who is this mystery girl? Is it scarlet when she was younger?! Hmm:) great update:) I can't wait for the next:) |
![]() ![]() I wan scarlet and cadie . |
![]() ![]() ![]() The bold and the caps plus the T.T.T.T thing make the diolouge look weird and unrealistic. If you need to do something to that effect then use italics or the tag line, both of which don't stand out heaps from the whole text, and look better. Eg (words inside {} are italics): "I was looking for {you} my {dearest princess}," I told her, smirking. The result of the deal was quite predictable, as then they would have to embark on some romantic thing where the guy eventually makes the girl fall for him, or something like that. I still think that you should revise your work more thoroughly but it's really your choice, and your story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the storyline so far, but you might want to work on your sentences a bit more. Mabye even get a beta (I'm one as well) to help. I say this because they don't make sense a lot of the time and detract from the flow, as well as from your (apparent) skills as a writer. I'm interested to see what happens next! |