Reviews for Rain
AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 2/18/2012
Great Job! Brilliant! My favourite like was 'And I'm crying, and the tears won't stop,'
Dark Blue Lover chapter 1 . 12/10/2011
Good work on this! Relatable, and with the rain you're creating a really beautiful picture. Especially like the end. "To forget what makes me cry, for a while." 3

If I may still give you a few tips...

in line 3: I'd make "anything" "any"; seems to flow better for me. - line 8: I'd make "like" "and". You've got "like" in the line after that one. - line 11: I'd take out "almost"... seems to flow better, since most lines are shorter than this one. But that's all just suggestions...

Anyway, good job! Really like this poem :) Keep writing!