|Reviews for Nightlife|
| Rubedo Jr chapter 1 . 12/22/2011
There's always an overarching energy to what you right, and it just draws me into the scene time and time again. I felt like I was a bystander passing through - I could hear the live set music echoing from the bar, it all had just a realness to it.
I love reading what you write for just that reason. It sucks you up, and once I've left the bright lights and intensity, all the colors outside just seem a little bit duller by contrast.
| thisaccountisclosedthanksbye chapter 1 . 12/21/2011
Really great story. I really loved the 'dizzy-dizzy', 'gray-gray' double thing you had going on there. It seemed to somehow emphasise the whole drunkenness of the situation.
I only saw a couple of errors, which were all along the lines of...
["Kiss me." She says...] should be ["Kiss me," she says...] because 'she says' is still a continuation of the same sentence.
But that's obviously a tiny nitpicking thing, and I wouldn't change the content at all. Really nice little snapshot of the night. Great job :)