Reviews for Unrequited |
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![]() ![]() Cute! great story :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think the pacing of the story's too fast, like you could add a little more details for the readers to understand better. But this being a oneshot, I think you did a pretty good job in portraying the characters. Maybe you could develop them a little more, though? Perhaps, why Nate was popular. And is Jane somewhat a social outcast, or just a normal girl? You could bear this in mind for you next story. Still, great job~! :D .. Pockets. |