Reviews for The Train
WritesForever chapter 1 . 6/8/2014
Short, but you got the point across. I really enjoyed this. It left me with just enough questions to make me wonder. Everything was perfect. I loved this.
MethodlessMadness chapter 1 . 1/12/2014
Oh. Oho. That's...dang, that was intense! I love it!
"I will never forget.", I don't think you will, dear.
TheWhimsicalDreamer chapter 1 . 2/25/2013
Wow, this...I don't even know what to say of this. The message is powerful as you've maybe been told before. Great job on this.
MagicWords chapter 1 . 11/4/2012
How tragic. Wonderfully written and tear jerking. I am so sorry. It makes you think.
sdfgfhgfjhj chapter 1 . 7/30/2012
This just left me speechless. I enjoy your writing.
Abbytjie chapter 1 . 6/29/2012
This is amazing.
It's very sad, but also extremely powerful.
One criticism: "But my parents, oh my sweet parents they did everything right." Seems unnecessarily long. You could change it to "But my parents, oh my sweet parents. They did everything right." or "But my parents, oh my sweet parents did everything right."
Other than that, really really great story.
TheGlycoprotein chapter 1 . 4/3/2012
I true example of how careless humans are. Beautifully put into words here.
AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 2/18/2012
This is heartbreaking, its so sad! :-( You wrote it brilliantly though! A great job!
Dark Blue Lover chapter 1 . 12/30/2011
O.o This is tragic, but powerful. Better not forget what's important. ... idk what to say. I appreciate this (can't really say 'like' with that kinda theme), so - good job!
floridapanther28 chapter 1 . 12/27/2011
Aw... what a powerful ending to that story.

I will never forget this poem. :) (*Cheesy)

You have a few fragmented sentences in there, but that's okay since this is poetry- it's supposed to be abstract.

I sure hope this didn't happen to you in real life... _"