[They were still silent untouched] I’m slightly confused by the sentence here. Did you mean the streets seemed silent and untouched? I think a comma between ‘silent’ and ‘untouched’ would make things clearer.

But beyond that quick mention, as usual, your writing continues to be quite flawless with hardly any errors. And even if there are errors, your story is engrossing enough that I tend to ignore it. It’s like what I’ve been told about playing an instrument – even if you make a mistake you just keep going because if your playing is beautiful enough, people hardly ever notice. And that’s what your story is: beautiful enough that errors just get forgotten and I’m more focused on hanging onto every word and the content rather than the technicality itself.

So, since I’m lacking reviewing capabilities at this point, I’m going to use the skeleton people give for reviews:

Plot: You’re doing very well in the plot progression. Rather than just jump at the action, you slowly build everything up. I like how you’re building up the intrigue with this peculiar town and with what Nadia is planning to do to Imara and the others. You’re not revealing everything at the moment. You give little hints at what is happening (in the case of Nadia) or set up how peculiar the town is (in the case of Ardis and Capron). This just heightens the suspense and makes readers wonder what you’re going to throw at them. You don’t use tricks and confusion to build up suspense (which is rather an easy way out of everything) but you set up a solid plot and make things go slowly enough to achieve the interest level needed for a story.

Characterization: Capron and Ardis continue to be characterized well. You’re continuing what you’ve been doing for them. Having Ardis adjust to her magic. Having Capron show some care for Ardis even though he hates magicians. Felix and Imara in this chapter didn’t quite as shine since their dialogue didn’t reveal too much about their character, except reaffirm all we already know about them. I want to specifically point out Katrin in this chapter, though. We haven’t seen much of her in awhile but she comes back the exact same as I remembered. She’s still that princess who is rude and views herself as better than most. She’s self-assured to the point that she can get others angry. I like how you have Katrin not an antagonist but nevertheless she isn’t a perfect character. She’s a nice contrast to all the nice and wonderful characters in your story.

Dialogue: Dialogue was written very nicely. Natural, to the point – you don’t spend time on dialogue that is irrelevant to everything. You show what matters and focus on what matters.

Relationships: Liking how Capron and Ardis are getting closer together again but there is still some suspicion between them. It shows how much Ardis’s reveal as a magician has impacted them but also how much they care for each other (since they don’t just abandon each other like that). Their relationship is great since they don’t immediately fall for one another but take some time in their relationship.

Overall: Great chapter. Heading onto the next one right now. :)

Signing off…

I just found your story yesterday and i haven't been able to peel my self away from it since! i just finished reading it and i can't wait for your update. you are a very talented writer, i hate reading stories where the main characters 'fall in love' with in a day of meeting each other; i'm loving your character and story development, you are moving it a good pace and not rushing it which is good and i'm so glad that i found this story yesterday. I don't know if anyone has said this but when i read your story i imagine Ardis as looking like daenerys targaryen with the icy blonde hair and all. You are a very talented writer and i think that you could definitely get this published in the future! hope you update soon, Happy Writing!

Wow, amazing chapter. I will be waiting patiently until the next chapter!

...Ok...now for the month long wait! :P

Another wonderful chappie. Can't wait for more.

A month away. Wow. I wish I could do that. Enjoy July! :)

Have a nice day :D

I love this chapter, really well written and good job setting it up! your scenes transition well, keep it up! this is going to be my new read!

Capron really needs to get over himself - she can't help it! Cannot wait for your next update!

Hey, this is B) I see now what you meant! Now he knows! Ahh! Well, I was actually impressed with how he handled that! I mean, he's mad, she's mad, but hey, they aren't after each others throats- they're alive! Hmm... What will they find? A clue that everyone else has missed? A map? And what happened to all the people? They must have been kednaped! Or turned into animals or something... I am just throwing random guesses out there so that when it does happen I can so totally call it. _ So, he knows now? That opens a door of communication if they end up getting seperated. Smaart. I like your logic!

...on word...Cliffhanger...O.O

Well its good thing ill be away in july to so my spirits wont be completly crushed :D

Love it! Like always, update soon!

YES! She updates! I am so happy right now But, wait, what is going on? What is Nadia going to do to Imara? Stronger blood? what? I smell something bad coming on! Capron is being weird as well... Hmmm...

Another great chapter. I liked all the interactions and descriptions. This deserted city has made me highly curious. Why isn't anyone there?

I guess I'll have to wait to find out.

Well done! Update soon! :) :D

Great chapter- capron seems to be getting... More tolerant, looking forward to the next update :)

Your description, especially in this chapter, is unbelievable. I can clearly picture the image in my head, it's that good. I'll be looking forward to the chapters :) But no pressure.. Though, saying that might have added pressure.. Err..woops..