Reviews for White Magic
Crazy Amazing chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
It started off slow but quickly gained momentum as it went on, which was good. However, it was quite confusing in places which made it difficult to read. Ignoring the few spelling errors, the story was hard to follow. The conversation between the King and Osra was confusing and towards the end, Torin announces that his brother, Torin killed the uncle which confused me particularly. I think if you made these parts clearer it would improve the overall reading.
Layne McCray chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
Great start! Can't wait to read more :)
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