why would he do that to her? She should have just left. ...Poor Ardis...

This was alright. Though your fantasy name choices should be reflective of the sort of era your fantasy takes place in. Blackwell hints more towards medieval, but i am unsure of where I imagine this story. The chapter may have been better starting with a set the scene sort of intro.
Thank you for writing this beautiful piece and may I ask that you slide on over to my gallery and see if I could do anything better in my pieces.

This is such a great story, you should like publish it! And u should write a sequel. Does Capron and Ardris get married? Does Torin and the princess?

Another great chapter! The whole time I was wishing Capron would say something but he didn't. Hopefully that will change in the next chapter. Can't wait to read more! :)

I am screaming right now! Why, why, why? MWa! You are pulling my emotions with this one. I have been banging my head against the wall for an update, but now I am banging my head because it is all going so wrong! Your writing is too good:) I will be dancing a jig until I see how much worse this can get.

Please please hurry and update

Correct me if I am wrong, but you are late again.

Very good. Will be waiting for an update!

(*Cries*) It ended too soon. Much too soon... Alright! Here we go. First of all, I loved that you put it Capron's POV. It is rare, sweet joy to get to hear his thoughts on what is going on. You made the thoughts of the male mind believable (good job!) He does not appear weak, though that is how he feels. Although I wondered, is he refusing to look at her to keep from drawing attention to them? That has not seemed to keep from Torin finding out his feelings for her. I shiver to think what the evil twin will do with that information. Oh, I can foresee so many possibilities! I wonder which road you will take us down next, seeing as you have pulled turns that I have not seen coming. xD Although I will wait like a good girl for you to update, I have one request... Don't make Captron betrothed to that princess! I would cry if that were to happen... Truly, I would. Of course you ended it on a note that keeps one hungering for more. And I would like more please!
Well, those are my thoughts for now. Until next chapter!

okay, glanced over the last chap and now I am wondering, WHY ISN'T SHE USING TELEKINESIS WITH HIM?! She can't really think that he would turn on her, right? RIGHT?! Gah! This is becoming a big, giant mess! T_T How will she know when the "thing" is out of her? How will she know that she is powerless? By that time it might be too late... Well, you have brought us this far. Bring us the rest of the way Captain Inked!

And I have one thing to say about Torin... *Hisss*

I actually really enjoyed this chapter. It feels as if I am truly reading a novel. Oh, the drama, oh, the seriousness! I LOVE it! I checked on sunday and monday for updates (it killed me that there wasn't one). I actually was starting to get worried that something happened to you. But if it is just school, meh. School is very important. Totally understand. I will be on standby for another update, though. ;)

I want to trust Torin too...but I can't. Something's telling me "no!" But keep updating! I wanna know what she was told!

Man I think Torin needs a swift kick lol please update sooner rather than later :)

I enjoyed this chapter. I can't wait to read more! :)

update? pleaseeee?