|Reviews for Wanderlust|
| Alice chapter 2 . 8/11/2012
...wow,this is incredibly chilling, Drew. I reallyreallyreally want to read on, and I will later, but rn I have to do more reviews for the Review Fest. D: Anyway, the ending should've been expected in retrospect, but while I was reading it totally threw me off. And I'm glad we got a few more details about what this entire thing is about, with the Wanderlust thing in the Prologue. Great job! You should keep writing this, you know. ;)
| Alice chapter 1 . 8/10/2012
Wow, this is great! I'm loving the mystery here! Who are the Trystes? Who is Bellona? What's going to happen to Trevor? Why had Aimee fallen asleep?
I love your writing, as per usual. It's really quite something. You weave words together in a way that's really impressive. Great job!
| autumn sea chapter 2 . 6/2/2012
Loved the first chapter! I'm really interested to find out more about this lost city. One critique I have is when the dialogue involves explaining the Artifact and their one clue...is it feels a bit forced. As though it is merely there so that the reader can understand what is going on. Personally, it felt - to me - like it didn't really flow. Like it was a bit stiff/fact...y to leave someone's mouth. I'm super intrigued, but that was just what I felt. I want to give an actual review instead of just spurting out compliments.
On another note, I really liked the first few paragraphs of interaction with Amiee and Yvette. It felt like they were really friends. The words you use to describe their conversations really help to paint a picture. :) Although after finishing the chapter, I wonder...is she the spy?
Also a quick question, how do you pronounce Szentendre? I'm also a little confused why the bit from the airport was slipped in the front. Not that it takes away from the story, just curious why that was done. :) So far Liam is my favourite character! You've written him so well. I thought the way Liam explained what was going on fit well into the chapter and seemed really natural.
Anyway - sorry for the lengthy review. I hope it was helpful. Loved the chapter, excited to read more!
| autumn sea chapter 1 . 6/2/2012
Loved the prologue. It got be hooked right away. :) Can't wait to move onto the next chapter! I really enjoy your writing style and the adjectives you use. Very...whimsical!
| Decapitatedchicken chapter 1 . 6/1/2012
Well, hello there you amazing writer, you! Seriously, you are one awesome writer. One of the best writers on fp i have ever come across, if i may be so bold to say. And why do I think that? Well, your descriptions are amazing! As the saying goes, "less is more," and you abide by that in a most wonderful way. Ex:
"For in front of them was possibly the most peculiar shop she'd ever seen. Jewel-studded veils were strung over the entrance, silver and electric blue and gold. Mist shrouded the inside of the store, the only visible opening being the polished wooden counter."
Seriously, other authors would have gone on and described such a place in perhaps 2-3 paragraphs but you managed to do it in one short one, and still I was able to picture the scene well. Also, your description of the city (which is too long to put here) was judt as good. You put enough description in and left enough out for the imagination of the reader to kick in; i love that. Personally, I dislike paragraph after paragraph of details because I think that overdescribing really detracts from the narrative and the overall flow of the story making it choppy. But your story isn't like that at all. Your writing is easy and it flows thus reading it is easy and, overall, the reading experience is fun. I look forward to seeing more characters and how you characterize and develop them.
So i have no constructive criticism to give you (as of this moment) sorry...so just keep up the good work i guess :)
| Charlotte Ender chapter 3 . 6/1/2012
I thought this was absolutely bloody brilliant! It's one of the best stories I have ever read, to be perfectly honest. You're an amazing author! :D I love your writing!
| Hi there chapter 1 . 5/27/2012
hi there! very interesting story you have here :) update soon! xxx
| SakurasApprentice chapter 2 . 3/13/2012
I must say I'm liking this so far!
Keep up the good work and I'll continue to read :)
| Serene Amethyst chapter 1 . 1/13/2012
This is really intriguing! Can't wait for more! Update soon :)
| Serene Amethyst chapter 2 . 1/13/2012
I haven't read such a good fantasy genre story in a long time. Your writing is excellent as well! Well written and a great plot, really can't wait for more. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! Please update soon!
| KatherineKnight1918 chapter 1 . 12/30/2011
That was amazing! Please continue!
| SophieInPink chapter 1 . 12/30/2011
Great start! This is really well thought out and executed. I feel like this story is going places!
| stuck in neverland chapter 1 . 12/30/2011
This is the first story I decided to read on FP. If a lot of them are written as well as this one, I don't think I'll ever leave.(:
This was really, really good. I'm not even really into the fantasy kind of thing but you wrote it so good that I just loved it. I love all of your characters, especially Bellona, and I get the kind of sense that something really bad is going to happen. So, Trevor got Bellona, a magical fairy, to make a necklace that would protect Aimee from the Trystes who are after the both of them for some reason... right? I'm really slow at picking things up, lol.
Great prologue. I'm legitimately excited for the next chapter!