Your poetry always makes me wish I had the words. I love you.

this is quite good. i love the half-rhyme you've got going on. the imagery is lovely. i love the contrast between those "with their pedals strapped tight" and the speaker of them. took me several times reading it to feel like i'd really read it. which is a good thing, in my opinion. definitely a good little piece.

This flowed well, even though it lacked rhyme. I loved the last line; how the rest was about moving forward and all that stuff, but then at the end it was the opppsite.