This is a very good story so far, I dont know why you didnt write another chapter? haha My favorite part:

"You all right?" the doctor laughs. I personally didn't find it funny at all but I nod my head.

Hahahaha I couldnt stop laughing. Very well done. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

This is really very good. I'm interested to know what prompted you to start writing this piece. Is it the vaccine debate which is going on around the world, is for school or did it just come from your imagination? I am putting you on author alert on the basis of this piece, i haven't read your others yet however I am going to right now, in the middle of my technology classs! Haha. This is a brilliant piece of writing and I can't wait for the rest.

Lily

You should keep on writing it its really good! Don't stop.

Hey,sounds great so far

This is very promising. I can't believe you're only fourteen. There's talent sweetie.

A great chapter. I am enticed by your details.

Hmmm... Interesting... cliffhangers, good description, interesting story line... Has the potential of a best-seller. This author could be good, keep a close eye. "The Virus" could be a huge hit.

I like how you arrange your events so they are easy to understand and organized. The ending was eerie and I enjoyed it. Keep it up