Reviews for Dragon's Apprentice
DragonSaphira chapter 8 . 10/17/2013
please continue!
Vivace.Assai chapter 8 . 6/9/2012
An interesting twist in the plot. I do like how Red and Shadow keeps fretting over each other. It clearly shows their affections for each other and I'm curious if they'll ever discover they both love each other and pursue their feelings. But of course, right now, there are a lot of problems between the clans so I'm curious what will happen next. Hopefully Shadow will be okay and the war doesn't kill too many dragons.

Thanks for the great read!

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Vivace.Assai chapter 7 . 6/3/2012
I liked this meeting. It showed a bit of the other clans, though I’m very curious to see more of them – it just adds more intrigue into the story and shows a world outside Forestclan. I also liked how you used Shadow’s change in becoming a warrior to explore Red’s and Shadow’s romance with each other. It was a subtle way to bring the plot forward again while also exploring how the two are from different worlds – impossible to fall in love with each other. I’m curious as to see how their romance will progress.

So far, the only critique I have for this story is the chapters are too short (I just want more of this story each update). But that's a minor critique and it all depends on the author's style so don't mind me.

Thanks for the great read.

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Vivace.Assai chapter 6 . 6/3/2012
Another nicely written chapter. I’m surprised that Sapphire has died but I guess that’s just the hardest part about fighting and battles – all the losses. I do think the death was a great plot element in propelling Red’s position in the clan and giving more difficulties for the future. Now as the new midwife, she’ll have a lot more to deal with and tackle while also fostering her love for Shadow. Meanwhile, her new vengeance towards the Meadowclan will make things a lot more difficult for the future so I’m very curious to how this revenge plan will play out and what will happen.

Can’t wait to read more.

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FireKingaj chapter 1 . 5/9/2012
This sounds like a really cool and great book but it sounds a lot like a book i read called warriors book one: into the wild. The dragon Red-Leaf-In-The-Fall sounds a lot like the cat firepaws who is also a outsider to his clan but still it is a really great book and hope to read more
Vivace.Assai chapter 5 . 4/24/2012
This was a pretty intense chapter. I'm glad there was more action since it really moves the plot forward. And your description of the battle was very nicely done - exciting and it had enough details that I could visualize what was happening nicely. I also liked the reason for the fighting since it was realistic and perfectly understandable - territory always starts wars.

I liked how you still remembered to incorporate Shadow's and Red's emotions in everything. The continuity is nice.

Thanks for the great read!

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Vivace.Assai chapter 4 . 3/27/2012
It was a nice chapter. Granted, I wanted some action to start happening and to maybe see a scene between Shadow and Red. However, the plot seems to be developing nicely. I like how you're first establishing the feelings Red and Shadow have for each other before starting them on whatever adventure they have to go on (or before moving the plot forward to exciting directions). It's good set-up for later chapters.

The writing was on par except for one little mistake:

[that You have been slacking in your work lately." Sapphire said...] Just a minor grammatical mistake but you don't need to capitalize "you" in the sentence.

Thanks for the good read.

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Vivace.Assai chapter 3 . 2/23/2012
Interesting progression. I was surprised at how quickly the plot went in this chapter. Time passed and feelings are blooming at a quick pace that I did not imagine. However, that does keep things more interesting, instead of droning on and on in development.

I can't wait to see what comes of Shadow's and Red's feelings for each other and what happens next.

Thanks for the great read!

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Vivace.Assai chapter 2 . 2/19/2012
Interesting first two chapters. I kind of like how you developed these first two chapters. The prologue introduced Sapphire with a brief look at Red, and then it focused on Red-Leaf-In-The-Fall. The way you did that was remarkable, and I never really say it coming.

I really like the names you've chosen though. They definitely give me the vibe of a clan, and I love what you've done.

This story seems really interesting, and I'm interested to read more and see how it develops.
Neuravinci chapter 2 . 2/18/2012
Nice chapter! Sorry it took me so long to review! My computer decided to die on me for a few days hah!

But yea, it's an interesting chapter and helps move the story along. I like how you're writing in scenes, each one adding to the story without adding unnecessary details.

You're doing a god job with the writing! Update soon! I just wonder why others are not reading this nice story...
Neuravinci chapter 1 . 1/1/2012
So the story is told from the POV of a dragon? How interesting!

One thing-Sapphire sounds like Saphira, from Eragon :) Just be careful with the names so no one thinks you're ripping off Eragon :) But nice prologue!