|Reviews for Here's To The Boys: Reflections of an Elders Fan|
| J.A. Fletcher chapter 1 . 1/8/2012
I don't feel quite the same way about your piece as you. I think it's wonderfully written and does not need a lot of work. I think it's a very heartfelt essay, and interesting through and through.
If you want to change something, then at the beginning when you're talking about tuning into LiveIreland, I think short sentences are best for talking about thoughts and feelings. In my opinion, they convey the rapidity of thoughts on a more human level and gives a better connection to the reader.
There was only one sentence I found confusing, and it was the first sentence in paragraph seven: "I had, by accident...".
Otherwise, your experience with the Elders was remarkable, and as someone who's been in entertainment, I have to say that Ian is one of a kind. Overall, great essay, and thanks for writing it.
Best of Luck,