|Reviews for Black Bureau|
| Emote Control chapter 4 . 1/18/2012
Another fine chapter. Does this take place in the same universe as the Cooper Grey story? Both have SPYDER and both have armed apes.
| Jave Harron chapter 4 . 1/16/2012
The gorilla chase scene here was pretty well executed. We got to see the lead characters developing well, but Lusk seems to lack a distinctive voice compared to Gray or Von Voltz. Looking forward to the following chapter.
| Jave Harron chapter 3 . 1/14/2012
I have to say, you're off to an excellent start. SPYDER related stuff is a nice villain agency to have, and your two main characters are pretty good so far. The pacing is fast, the action is mostly nonstop, and damn, I am honestly impressed with this compared to even some of your other recent works.
| dreamshell chapter 3 . 1/13/2012
I'm liking this one a lot so far. Solid main cast and idea and I'm interested to see more SPYDER shenanigans.
A couple things could have been done differently, though. For one, I think Gray has pretty much none of the required adjustment time characters in fiction need when they're introduced to some heretofore unknown weirdness. Just a little bit of it would've been nice; it makes sense for the sort of no-nonsense, by-the-book Federal officer he seems to be.
Second, the lead-in to Bronco Burger isn't established very well. I have no real idea what compelled Gray and Von Voltz to investigate it other than the plot demanded it. Maybe it was in the dialogue with Hoover and I missed it? Regardless, it could have been stronger. Also, why is no worried about containing leaks about UFO sightings or convincing witnesses what they saw wasn't what they think they saw?
The Road Rogues were also a bit anticlimactic here, though I'm assuming they're going to feature in at least the next chapter as well. Still, it seems a bit weak for a group as badass as SPYDER (Seriously, taking out Soviets on their own turf? Even the Nazis couldn't accomplish that. PLUS, they use mind-controlled gorilla soldiers!) to depend on the competence of a bunch of bikers. At the very least, it should be someone lower down on the echelon than WEAVER (who felt implied to me to be fairly high-up) giving them orders, as Lusk later informs Gray. Waite, maybe? But I'm guessing you've got some good stuff cooked up for a reunion between him and Gray.
Anyway, I'll be reading. ;)
| SarahTheTrainer chapter 3 . 1/13/2012
I didn't read all of it... it was to long and I have a very short attention span...
But the plot of this is really good! :D
Even though I deleted all of my other work because... yeah, I didn't realy like it...
This is awesome!
| Emote Control chapter 3 . 1/13/2012
A top quality chapter, as always. The setup is similiar to Squid Squad, with a prejudiced-but-honorable cop who must team up with an odd partner against an unnatural force. But nothing wrong with that!
One more thing. It should be "secure the site", not "secure the sight".
| SarahTheTrainer chapter 2 . 1/12/2012
I wonder what SPYDER, WEB, and WEAVER means? O-o this is amazing and so well detailed! Are there any good filming schools in California? I wanna go there one day...LOL I looked at your profile XD
| SarahTheTrainer chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
Oooh! This is gonna get goooood!