Reviews for The Void
Bob Story Builder chapter 1 . 2/27/2016
This is a dark poem. The last line I thought originally read "of every body" and was thinking now why would "every" and "body" be separated? Then I looked again and realized it reads "of every boy" which seems to make this poem darker because it is focusing on one gender. Now going back and looking over the poem with boys in mind I found the words to take a darker and more perverse connotation. Robustly written.
CorkyBookworm1 chapter 1 . 7/19/2013
Hmm, I do like this poem. It's very rhythmic (I know I keep saying this about all your poems, but I truly just love it!) and the rhyming feels easy, a feat I have yet to master...even a tiny bit. I am curious, however, as to why you narrowed out boys. Is there no void for girls? I understand the rhyming purposes of it, but why not "take the minds/of every girl and boy" or just "girl and boy" would fit better with the rhythm. I don't know. It just felt like you'd cut the world in half with that last line.