|Reviews for Political Engagement|
| dream-beautiful chapter 26 . 4/7/2012
Ahh, too cute.
| Fryvi chapter 26 . 4/7/2012
What a sweet chapter! I think it's nice when they aren't always fightning, and I was so glad when Rysem said he doesn't need to knock:D Not that the fighting has to stop though, but it's nice with variation
| Checkerspades chapter 26 . 4/7/2012
I like Rysem in his playful mood, it's kind of cute xD I kind of imagine Orlenth with this kitten face (like in Shrek, pussy in boots) when he asks "Can I" so adorable... got two kittens at home right now, five days old, that are just as adorable as Rysem and Orlenth in this chapter.
I probably shouldn't review when I'm this tired...
| Chowdizzle chapter 26 . 4/6/2012
Good weird definitely. Its cute cute how Orlenth needs Rysem to sleep, but ahhh the build up is taking so long I'm getting impatient :p
| Lynna chapter 25 . 4/1/2012
Hahahaha, funny Orly! Yup, just work it together!
| Aquitaine chapter 25 . 4/1/2012
Thus isn't finished right? Please?
| Aquitaine chapter 24 . 4/1/2012
1) I think that the mood was supposed to come off as confused/lonely, but it really just came across as confused to me.
2) I think you're safe as far as character development :)
| Fryvi chapter 24 . 3/30/2012
This chapter made me all giggly:D
But which mood do you mean? The awkwardness?
Though I'm not a guy, they seem pretty male to me at least:)
| Lynna chapter 24 . 3/29/2012
No worries, this introspection is in charater and they seem all male, its just insecurity that makes Orlenth act this way.
And personally, I think that being in a relationship there's no boundaries to whether a character is behaves like a male or not, let things just fall natually and it will be all fine!
| So fucking lazy chapter 24 . 3/29/2012
Hurr. I think that O came across as lonely, confused and just a tad desperate.. To me at least. I dunno if that's gow it was how it was supposed to be..
As for coming across as male, I felt as if they did.. But I'm a somewhat flamingly gay tranny man so.. I might be a bad person to ask. Hope I'm helpful. :)
| fuzzipueo chapter 24 . 3/29/2012
The melancholy Orlenth feels comes through quite clearly here. It doesn't help that he's in a bit of denial about the reason (could it be he's finally ready to start, at the least, admitting he has feelings for Rysem?).
As for your one shot: I'd love to see the world through Zalon's eyes. What makes Zalon tick and why is he so determined to have Juele? Why does he feel that he should be the most important person in Juele's life and how does he feel about the fact that Juele isn't returning the attraction?
This is the bad thing about first person narratives, or narratives that focus only on one character's actions and thoughts. We don't get anything from the other side.
As for your other question ... they seem reasonably male to me. However, if you're unsure, I highly recommend widening your reading base to include reading more books featuring male characters by male authors. Depending on who you read, the characters can be as emotive as boards to extremely emotive - that has to do with how the author deals with character actions, emotions and personality as well as the author's personal experiences. To this end I suggest: Josh Lanyon (whose characters run the gamut [he also wrote a book on how to write for the m/m market]), Greg Herren, Richard Stevenson, Victor Banis, and Richard Mark Zubro.
| Checkerspades chapter 24 . 3/29/2012
The chapter was a calm one, I think it fit well for Orlenth's... problem. All in all it was good
Hmm. I can't say I know better about if your characters are manly or not. Rysem feels very manly though. Orlenth is like a spoiled and grumpy version of my boyfriend... and people thought he was gay before he met me. Apparently I'm manlier than him too, so...
I don't really think much of how a male character should act or not, because I've met so many people that really would be described as girly (giggle, loves cute cuddly stuff, care about their appearances, watch 'chick flicks', hugs alot.." and they're as straight as they come. But as I've said, Rysem is very manly to me.
And one shot... it would be fun to read something about a ne Kaiza, since they tend to be there, but only in the background. Would be nice to get to know them a bit better.
| ilsa chapter 24 . 3/29/2012
Well, honestly, I think that gender doesn't really matter when it comes to love. Maybe they don't come across as overwhelmingly homo- or heterosexual, but that's fine. It only serves to remove the gender-based side of "do I like this person". When this aspect is removed, then works, imo, become more welcoming, timeless and relatable to people of all kinds.
Yes, writing is a little rough, but I'm pretty sure your message comes across nicely. Besides, much of prose is up to the reader's interpretation.
As for the one shot, write one about Jevan, please! _
| CalliScribbles chapter 23 . 3/28/2012
Awww. Well, Orlenth would know about what's good for the orphans. Though it seems to me that he and Rysem now can't go a week without fighting and that their fights are becoming somewhat ridiculous even to them.
| Lynna chapter 23 . 3/27/2012
Seems like Orlenth still don't trust Rysem enough, but caring for kids totally unrelated to him show that he has a sensitive heart!
Love this Orlenth you created!