Reviews for This Little Human Life
ChildCalledSilence chapter 1 . 1/24/2013
You know you're really making the rest of us authors who put poems up here look bad. How on earth are we mere mortals supposed to rival this kind of artistry. The only slight problem I have with it is lines 34-35 read a little awkwardly. I can see why you wrote it like that to keep with the rhyme scheme, but it doesn't read as well as it could. There was only one minor error, which was just what you probably missed during editing. On line 26 You forgot to capitalize.
J.M. Black chapter 1 . 1/19/2012
Wow... That was spectacular. Truly, a great poem; and I'm not just saying that. The rythm and rhyming went perfectly with the story, which made it so easy to read and understand. Honestly, at first I wasn't expecting much, but this is really amazing.

Keep writing!
Owl-of-Artemis chapter 1 . 1/19/2012
Very nice-I say just scatter a few comma's in there- but other than that I like the usage of alot of ending words to flow into the next line- and of course, tis nice to think that some boys still want to be men someday instead of useless 'playas' and pimps. :P