This is interesting. I like it. :)

This made me laugh! Oh my god! "And tapping Unicorns that can shit out rainbows!" LOL!

I found some grammatical errors. Everyone has those. When your talking about a number of things, it's Two not To. I just wanted to clarify that. Overall, nicely done! I wanted to start a story kinda like that, but thought it sounded too... Percy Jackson and the Olympians. You did this nicely, and I give you a A!

Great start with the story, can't wait to see what happens next! :D