Reviews for Immortal
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 20 . 6/21/2012
I think I've read the chapter before this one before I got the alert that you updated both... wait does that make sense? ... anyways... Great chapter! ... and you're welcome.

Keep up the great work :) :)

Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 19 . 6/6/2012
great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!

I think I should just let you know, chapter eighteen that you posted yesterday(?) is the prologue.

Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 17 . 6/2/2012
Great chapter! I think I finally understand what's going on now! I'm sooo happy!

Tarah xXx
Distraction98 chapter 17 . 5/31/2012
First of all I'm liking the story so far and secondly I think that dream would make an interesting story, I think you should write it:)
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 16 . 5/26/2012
great chapter!

You may want to separate your paragraphs a bit. When her dad comes, I don't really know who's speaking when.

Was Max introduced before? I'm not good at remembering these things...

Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 15 . 5/26/2012
Great chapter!

I guess I'm kind of confused about what's real and what isn't. You may want to explain things more so that we can almost picture what happened. It seemed like there were two different sets of images that Amanda(?) sent to him, and he knew that one of them wasn't real but he didn't know that the other one was real... now I'm confusing myself!

Sorry... I'm kind of picky...

Also, you spelled my Pen Name right, but there's no space between the two. When I don't know how to spell someone's name, I just copy and paste from the e-mail alerts I get.

Tarah xXx
RottyBones chapter 1 . 5/21/2012
I'm really fond of the whole; "Then explain the dead vampires!" sentence. Really made me chuckle.
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 14 . 5/4/2012
great chapter. There were just a few places where stuff was messed up

Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 13 . 4/18/2012
interesting chapter.

I think it ended a bit abruptly. I would say it's short, but all the chapters I post are like that so...

Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 12 . 4/13/2012
amazing story!

Sounds like there'll be some awesome fighting! (wait that didn't come out right...)

Update soon please!

Tarah xXx
Distraction98 chapter 11 . 3/28/2012
Loved it:)
Sarah-Nikole chapter 7 . 2/29/2012
I LOVE your story! Taylor told me about it an now I'm obsessed! Hehe it's GREAT! Can't wait to see what happens next!:)
Le Rien chapter 7 . 2/29/2012
You're GROUNDED? Ow. You poor thing.

Anyway, a good chapter again. But you probably already knew that. Code vampire... Hmm.

I wonder what will happen when Charlie will look for his sister. And what Sarah will learn with the vampires. And what River will... Well, I suppose pretty much questions are dancing in my head. And a month for waiting...

Look forward to the 30th of March then!
Distraction98 chapter 6 . 2/27/2012
Ugggg I hate cliff hangers, but it was still good chapter;)
Kingdomalith chapter 5 . 2/22/2012
O.o

Huh... so...this is getting tense.

Anyways, I am sorry for not reviewing the previous chapters.

Although, I do want to ask what type of vampires are in this story, what powers they have, etc.

Do they fly? They go out in the sunlight? How do hunters know where the next vampire attack will be? She was a hunter when she was ten? How does one turn into a vampire in your stroy? Are vampires born? Do the vampires have vampiric speed, strength etc? Are hunters born into like a special family or so; or do normal people just turn into hunters? In your story, what ways would hunters use to find out if a person is a vampire? Do the vampires in your world sleep? How often do they need blood? If a person is turned into a vampire, who long would the process take? What, besides stakes, fire, and silver can kill a vampire? If hunters are born into special families and with increased abilities that exceed most humans; what are these abilities and how much do they exceed that of a normal human? To the vampires, does every bloodtype taste the same? How would one hide the fact they are a vampire? Do the vampires in your story live in covens? Are they ruled by stronger, older vampires? If so, do they have any laws?

Sorry for the many questions XD I like to know things that aren't really mentioned in the story.

So if you would answer them in a PM to me, or just in the chapter then that's cool. I also understand if you do not answer some due to some of the answers may give away the plot/ending/etc so if you could answer at least some then that would be fine with me.

Oh and as the story progresses I might have more questions; depending though.

Anyways, I think it is a rather interesting story that has allot of potential, I will continue to read it until the end. Good luck and well done so far!

~Kingdomalith
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