I HEART TORI!

Ah Tori... you amuse me. I shall continue on with the reading!

Lol. Interesting... I think I like.

Wow! I loved this story! I thought the pacing and the action were very well-set. I was particulary impressed with how real the characters seemed. They weren't flat at all, but had real motivations and thoughts. You mentioned that you'd be taking the story down for editing soon. One thing that really confused me was how similar the names were. Johnny and Jeremy, for instance, had me reading several lines over. And Cholette (whose name I adore, by the way) actually made me see "Charlotte" at first...and then when it DID read Charlotte, I thought it was a really strange type-o. The boyfriends of the secondary characters didn't get much screentime either, so it was a little jolting when they suddenly showed up, though I like that you put them there to give even the secondary characters more depth. Unlike a lot of stories (even published ones), you didn't dump a bunch of supporting characters in at the beginning, ignore them for most of the story, then dust them off and expect everyone to remember them at the end. Best of luck to you, and keep writing! You obviously have talent for it.

I forgot to put this story on my fav list. OK - done!

I loved this! Really really good. I want a Ryan Sumner as well ;)
I'm definitely checking out On the Hunt now!

Bububununbunununubuninj Oh goooodod I loved this story, really good. I am right now going to log into my account to favourite it. You know, just that is a major compliment, I NEVER log in

omg. WHAT! SO EXCITED

This story was AWESOME! :D Loved it. On to the sequel now! B-)

I LOVE THIS STORY HEBHBH GAHABUGSGWD D WHG QW

Good story & u left room for a sequel. OK! Bring it on.
JD Fly

I've seen your story on here before, but I've never got a chance to read it until now. I just wanted to say that your story is fantastic. I've loved every word from page 1. The plot was so riveting that I'm now up at 1:30 in the morning having just finished it! I'm really looking forward to reading a sequel and anything else you plan to share :)

I really enjoyed how lighthearted and fun you made this story! I was definitely expecting something different, but really liked the balance between suspense and the playful banter Tori and Ryan had. I'm definitely looking forward to a sequel!

This has been in my bookmarks for the past couple of months but it was only a few hours ago that I started reading. Now that I'm done, I sorely regret I didn't read it sooner. In spite of grammatical errors, your story is truly one of the best I've read in this genre. Thank you for writing Ryan and Tori's story. Definitely adding this to my fave stories. Happy New Year! :-)

Wow! I LOVED this story, and I LOVE your work! Can't wait to read the other stuff you've written! :)