I suggest adding more of the characters thoughts and feelings
Little bit...

I really like your story. But it's all a bit rushed. And I think you could add in a bit more descriptions. There's mostly just dialogue and it makes it kind of hard to really relate to Noah. I mean, sure, it's horrible what he's going through, but how does he feel?
And PLEASE don't end this here. It wouldn't be satisfying at all! ;_;

keep it going it getting really good

KEEP GOING! RAWR THIS DINO COMMANDS YOU!

Ohhhhhmigosh~!

Was NOT expecting that one right there. Wooo ._.

Definatelyyy looking forward to that next update. Wow /

Amazeballs. (:

You have a great storyline although i think you could do more describing. If you need some help with the description you should try reading some other male on male stories so you can detail yours more.

it would be nice to have some sort of time line to start like, "few hours later or few weeks later" as it seems sorta jumpy, but Good job elsewise!

Oh snap. I can't believe he said that

Omg. Last chap was was so sad! Story is heartbreaking. Update soon

Nice job, but you're right, way too short. Good job tho...

On the other hand, I'm having a helluva time uploading stuff, are you?

Aww man this is awesome. Update soon! I'm a fan :)

-Chester.

Nice work! I like this story!

;A;

This story...is beautiful. It really is ._. you had me giggling and gasping while reading this, its just..wow.

You just got yourself a dedicated reader, and if you need any help- any at all- just let me know and I'll be more than happy to help~

Keep up the awesome T_T

So far, so good. :) Except, the chapter was a little short, but it was still interesting. I think it's funny how his client is in love with him. Can't wait for the next chapter