Reviews for Batmaster's and Frosty: Zero Hour
Pilesthewarthog chapter 2 . 11/7/2012
Once again, another case of TMI. Now you're introducing Frosty but her motivation makes very little sense. It's almost random the way the story shifts to her POV without notice.

Cut down on unnecessary exposition and keep trying.
Pilesthewarthog chapter 1 . 11/7/2012
Interesting first chapter, if not flawed.

I feel that your fic is suffering from TMI, Too much information. While the backstory and powers are all interesting, you haven't given us a reason to 'care' about this character or her amazing powers.

I did like your fight scene and Batmaster taking care of the bank heist but with all the robbers, sometimes it's hard to keep track of all of them. Also, a lump forming on the head clashes with the dark tone.

Keep writing!
Baby BlueJay chapter 2 . 6/27/2012
I seriously love this story. It's unique and creative, not to mention original. You're a great writer, and I can't wait to read more. Frosty and Batmaster? Can't wait to see how this turns out... ;P

Baby BlueJay
WeirdRaptor chapter 1 . 6/26/2012
Hey, hey, hey, it's ElvenRaptor from devART, the guy who wrote Elemental Guardian. I see you're also posting you're story here.

Just like before, excellently done.