Reviews for World's End Inn
Veromorphia chapter 1 . 2/11/2012
This was an interesting afterlife story, mostly because of the very real feeling of limbo. The concrete image of the rise clip is powerful, but would be more powerful at the end if it was shown closer to the beginning. Maybe it can be one of the first details Lily notices about Rose, worn in her hair. And maybe she could find it in her own hair when she wakes up. Although detail is a good thing and done well in this story, sometimes you would repeat yourself in different words, i.e. "Her eyes were sparkling. She was about to cry." A lot of the language could be trimmed down, but all in all, this was a good little story, and unique. Thanks for posting.