Reviews for Initiative 8
chivated chapter 1 . 2/15/2012
I really liked this story. A kind of depressing ending, but it was very fitting. You only had one chapter, but it was all that was needed to tell the story. I loved how you managed to give a good idea of what Danny and Leslie were like without slowing done the story.

I do feel like maybe it would have made more sense for Danny to try to get to know the football team players, at least the suspects. What you wrote is totally awesome, though.

Also, bravo for the decent spelling and grammar that is so hard to find nowadays. It really makes or breaks your story.

Nice job.