Reviews for I Will Try To Fix You
SimranVim chapter 19 . 7/4/2012
Oh come on! This is one of my fav book and you
Haven't put up a chapter in three months! Have you abandoned the story? If so , then so will I.
SimranVim chapter 1 . 6/12/2012
Come on man! I've been waiting 2 months for at least one chapter to be uploaded . Please dont say you've given up on it! You were doing so well!
apersonbro chapter 1 . 3/20/2012
I LOVE this story. Seriously, I love how detailed and all it is. It's got an awesome plot too. Can't wait til the next update!
morexforxme chapter 2 . 3/11/2012
Oooh, I like this so much! Poor Eleanor... and Asher sounds yummy!

Love your writing style. I intend to read this entire fic!
dreamercrys chapter 14 . 3/11/2012
Poor girl can never get a break... (
dreamercrys chapter 13 . 3/8/2012
A cliffhanger? You're killing me here lol
dreamercrys chapter 12 . 3/7/2012
Love it! Wish I had a sexy Norwegian hunk who liked me...lol Can't wait for more!
buttercup123 chapter 10 . 2/26/2012
I just found your story, and I have to say I find it quite interesting. I feel so awful for the emotional and physical pain Cain put Eleanor through, and I hope things get better for her :)
Shelby Jacobs chapter 2 . 2/20/2012
Interesting opening. You have a good command of words and phrases. The story line has a lot of potential. You are a good story teller. May I make a couple of suggestions that might make it easier for the reader?

1. Do not have two characters speaking in the same paragraph. Give each a separate paragraph. Visually it opens the page and allows me to read without concentration. when I see those long paragraphs, my eyes cloud over. Break them up.

2. Your writing is like my own. I tend to be too wordy with descriptions and adjectives and adverbs. As I rewrite and edit, I generally erase some good stuff that gets in the way. Example:

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Finally after an excruciatingly long pause Viktor spoke up, "When did they start again?" he asked gently, knowing it had been several days since the pair had spoken.

***

Try this:

After a long pause, Victor spoke softly,"When did they start again?"

***

As a reader this is easier for me. You will tell me later how long it has been since they spoke.

Finally, you have the potential to be a fine writer. I suggest you read a lot in the genre you wish to write. This will give you a feel for what is published and what sells.

I would appreciate your comments on my story "Charley and the Coach". I particularly interested in character development and story line. This is an erotic romance novel but the first five chapters are fairly tame.
Jasmine951 chapter 7 . 2/19/2012
I really love your story update when your can. :)
huhnj chapter 7 . 2/18/2012
I just want to let you know that I recently started reading this story and love it! So don't be sad about less readers. I can't wait to see how Eleanor and Asher's relationship develops.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Jasmine951 chapter 4 . 2/14/2012
Its very intresting. Update soon
Kangae no Hinansho chapter 3 . 2/13/2012
I really like this. It is well written and flows perfectly. The only thing I would point out is the Russian. It's great that you provided the definition in the story but I think that at the end of the chapter you should include pronunciation. It jars the story when you are reading and come across symbols you cannot pronounce.
Kangae no Hinansho chapter 3 . 2/13/2012
I really like this. It is well written and flows perfectly. The only thing I would point out is the Russian. It's great that you provided the definition in the story but I think that at the end of the chapter you should include pronunciation. It jars the story when you are reading and come across symbols you cannot pronounce.
Kangae no Hinansho chapter 3 . 2/13/2012
I really like this. It is well written and flows perfectly. The only thing I would point out is the Russian. It's great that you provided the definition in the story but I think that at the end of the chapter you should include pronunciation. It jars the story when you are reading and come across symbols you cannot pronounce.
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