|Reviews for Heart Princesses|
| True Talker chapter 1 . 2/17/2012
This is written quite well and I did enjoy reading it. Thank you for explaining everything and I ask that you don't overload yourself at all what so ever. I just want everyone to be okay.
Critique; - 3rd last segment - ...man Mayan man... - This would make more sense written this way - ... man, Mayan...
Futher down - ... Heart Princess's. - Belonging to, the Princess's Heart belongs to her and so you need "'s" at the end of Princess.
Further down - But someone does something foolish that should've been avoided... - That is the way that you should write this as to have it make more sense.
Thank you for sharing this with everyone.