this story seems promising.. D.. great job!... )..

I quite like the first chapter(?) of your story so far. I like how the narrative works where you slowly expose more about the characters rather than just up and saying "Hi my name is Soandso and I'm a 16 year old high school student". Your narrative speaks of a lot more confidence in your writing. I like how you portray Grace in a way that gives her plenty of hidden depths to explore. I like Theo's character so far as well. He seems relateable (for me at least ;; ) and I want to hear more about him too. Your style of writing seems almost poetic, painting a clear picture while still skillfully focusing on the dialogue. I look forward to reading what you will write next u!

good job. i really like it