|Reviews for The Ten Rings: The Tomb of Syethis|
| Solomon Sia chapter 1 . 4/1/2012
Love the descriptiveness and action of the first chapter. I don't understand why it doen't have more reviews! All who read this, review please!
Suddenly, a hand appeared out of thin. There was a crunch as the hand slammed through Gob's chest, tearing into him like butter.
Gob looked down at the hand impaled in him, and managed to croak something out, before the hand ripped itself out of him, Gob's heart clutched in its claws.
Should be 'out of thin air'.
The graveyard was not very well managed of, due to neglectance by its caretaker, a drunk known as Gob. Gob live in a small shed within the graveyard,
The graveyard was not very well managed, due to neglect by its caretaker, a drunk known as Gob. Gob lived in a small shed...
| magical tuna steak chapter 1 . 3/15/2012
this is really good so far for what i've read :D
i'm favouriting it so i can read later ~
i wonder why this doesn't have any reviews XD
anyway, i'll keep reading and let you know what i think at the end