Reviews for Over You
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 21 . 5/25/2012
i WILL GO AND CHECK YOUR OTHERFANFICS, AWW A LITTLE GIRL, i love to see yur nwe story enxt week
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 20 . 5/18/2012
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 19 . 5/11/2012
Okay That was a cool chapter... Gotta love romances..can't wait ill friday
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 18 . 5/5/2012
What a nice chapter! Cabn't wait till friday and I forrgive you since school is even a burden on me.
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 17 . 4/28/2012
Aww i loved this chapter. gives me even more of a reason to like fridays now that you nly update then...can't wait for more next friday
Ice Bubble chapter 3 . 4/20/2012
What the hell? Why on earth would she let him kiss her?
Ice Bubble chapter 1 . 4/20/2012
You should be careful with your tenses: you tend to switch them up 'accidentally'. And seem to be missing out words quite frequently in the chapter, so perhaps proof-reading would be good; and if you already do that then maybe do it a few more times just to be safe.

And also, details tend to be important, though too much can be overbearing and make the plot of the story seem to be at a crawling pace. For example, when Ryanne was at the gym and Alec spoke to her, there was no imagery whatsoever, except for her looking in the rear-view mirror. We didn't even know Alec was OUTSIDE versus being INSIDE until you mentioned it at the last minute. Such things help to get the whole scene across to the reader.

And editing is IMPORTANT because many people will NOT read a story just because there is no grammar. It gives off an image of not caring about your work and what other people think of it and that your readers are not deserving enough for you to proof read your own work before publishing it. And if anything, you could always look for a BETA to help you. :)

Hope this helps.
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 16 . 4/20/2012
Yeah fraternal is what i meant... Can't wait for next friday's update
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 15 . 4/15/2012
Sure make her pregant and i prefer phentenal , a boy and girl
TasteTheFreakingRainbow chapter 15 . 4/15/2012
baby should be a girl NO TWINS BOY AND GIRL! idk im hyper
TasteTheFreakingRainbow chapter 14 . 4/9/2012
TasteTheFreakingRainbow chapter 13 . 4/5/2012
TasteTheFreakingRainbow chapter 12 . 3/31/2012
Wings of Beauty chapter 12 . 3/30/2012
LuckycoolHawk9 chapter 12 . 3/30/2012
Yeah can't wait for more whenver you update
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