|Reviews for The Crutch|
| Loren chapter 1 . 3/1/2012
It's good, but your diction needs some work. Your words are very sophisticated in this story, but it is not a sophisticated story, it's about a normal guy in a very normal situation. The phrasing doesn't match up with the subject matter. Your narration, especially, reads more like a documentary rather than a hot-blooded young man's thoughts about a girl. The plot is good, but my suggestion would be to try and tell this story like you would tell it to a friend. Try and break out of the whole "storytelling" mode and just tell a story.
| Kohryu chapter 1 . 2/29/2012
yuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuup constant thing for me in my travels of college classes...oh well, life moves on and so does the heart
| IndiLovely chapter 1 . 2/28/2012
Aw, poor Tom :(
Hope that guy's not her boyfriend, then Tom would be even more upset :'(
Good story so far though!