Reviews for How to Survive a Zombie Apocalypse
Y. S. Wong chapter 1 . 11/11/2013
Finally reading this one. (*w*)

I can see a lot of attempts at humor. Could it be executed better? Yes. A lot of the humor strikes me as just random tomfoolery; I tend to prefer more wit in my gags. But the effort is appreciated nonetheless and you have a lot of charisma in your writer's voice. Poor Mama though.

Although, why didn't Duff grab the gun?
Cookie Maker chapter 6 . 10/23/2013
Type your review for this chapter here...
Sentimental RainCloud chapter 1 . 10/23/2013

Well, I read and now it's reviewing time. Not what I had anticipated, lovah. Duff sounds as crazy as you are, darling. QnQ
JUSTIN BEIBER!? Your first tip should have been. In an zombie apocalypse, use Justin and his music to repel brain-eaters. How could Duffy leave the poor dog to be eaten? How heartless(tilde)!

Here is where I give my darling some constructive criticism. There were a few odd phrasing and punctuation errors and sentence fragments. When you are up to it, I suggest fixing it, if not. I can't force you. I would have liked if you used some descriptive words and so forth. It was a nice read, but a bit over the place for me. I didn't fell as if it was properly organised. In the sense of what really happened at this apocalypse.

Overall, I enjoyed it. Keep working on execution, my lovah
Rivenwyte chapter 1 . 10/1/2013
That made me crack up at how the main character reacted to the zombies. The whole zombie thing has been overdone lately but I find this refreshing compared to people not doing anything to retaliate, make stupid mistakes, and then die. This is more my kind of humor, and I'm glad there are a lot more chapters. Plus, it's first POV and those ar great as you get into the character's mind and how they're reacting/going to react to the world around them.
Baka-iinchou chapter 1 . 9/30/2013
Hahaha, i don't even think that i have a giant pencil :) but yeah, that can be a bad idea. :3
HeroofEnelios chapter 1 . 9/21/2013
"When they aren't eating brains, they can actually be awesome. They're excellent stylists and do the moonwalk like professionals and make the best cotton candy"
Why is this so funny to me? I have no idea... but it is xD

Anyways this looks like it will be a very comical and amusing story, and it's off to a great start/ I like it!
Annoyed Reader chapter 1 . 9/16/2013
Sombrette: why read something if you don't like it? Pffft. Pathetic. I nwver review and am sorry for that Lolitroy but people like that just need a life.
Sombrette chapter 1 . 9/15/2013
Hello, returning your review. :)

[I'm {In} the middle of the Armageddon...] - typo with 'in' should be lowercase.

So I know this is supposed to be humorous and a parody, but I don't think the writing should fall short because of those reasons. I felt like this was focusing to much on trying to be funny that other aspects of the story were ignored. Like the setting and what was going on around her. I had no visuals at all, first she's doing 'this', than she's all of a sudden over here doing 'this' with nothing leading up to it. She's at the mall, for whatever reason, then she's running into a door outside. Which door? Door to what? So that's what I mean about giving some more details to the setting and her surroundings to make this less jumbled.

Another thing, you should spell out numbers. Like: [...behind me and grabbed option {2 and 4}.] - should be 'two and four'.

[Scream {like retarded}. Many wimpy teens and girls and boys that like their same gender do this.] - You probably mean 'like a retard', which isn't any better. I honestly didn't care for this line at all, I get that it's supposed to come off as funny but it mostly comes off as irritating and ignorant. Which I supposed fits with the character since she's this young teen but it just makes her look bad.

I don't read parodies often, I know that there can be some leniency stylistically when dealing with parodies. Like plots not all that important and whatever. So I understand that all this randomness is meant to be funny, but I don't really find it funny at all. It's just too random. You can make a parody/funny story without having to be super random. If everything fits together and makes sense, it adds to the story. Right now this just looks like a weird crack of Zombieland.

I think this could be more funny if you used more witty humor. But the jokes and 'funny' lines are just odd, making no sense. Sorry this review is so negative, I will say I think if you really looked at the story and cleaned up some of the randomness it might read better. Anyway, good luck with the rest.
xxxyx chapter 14 . 9/13/2013
'We began destroying the room.' -lol
'I broke the what-the-hell-did-I-just-see silence. "Awesome."' - Duff, did you just caught a cheesiness?
'"That the logo from Huggies is actually a girl?"' Pffhaha...
Anyway, for the A/N, don't worry, the amateur-ish thing is a big part of the charm. Just... work hard to be a professional amateur! *dramatic pose*
And thus, I've finished reading Lolitroy-ism. Hope you'll start writing again soon!
Jax Creation chapter 1 . 9/13/2013
Pffft, this is awesome. XD Like Zombieland but with a silly teenaged girl called Duff as the MC instead of OCD... whatever his name is. Good humour, very light-hearted narration.

Couple of wording/tense typos but I won't go into that ;)

The Justin Bieber comment made my day (-w-)b Scream and flee like your life depends on it indeed!
Unweighted Book Author chapter 1 . 9/11/2013
The writing is a little childish and very superficial, with lots of cheap jokes. But, hey, that's the beauty of it all. If you're going to write a first person story with a sixteen year old girl who obviously isn't the most self-conscious, mature person in the world, then it all fits in very nicely. Add in the fact that she's probably unhinged from the apocalypse (I know it's a parody story which explains the absurd behavior, but still) and this is just the kind of prose that I would expect to see from a main character like this.

i'm looking forward to seeing what other characters will appear. The premise of a zombie story is, obviously, self-evident, but the devil is really in the details here. How you develop the story will determine just how interesting the story turns out to be.
xxxyx chapter 13 . 9/10/2013
Like the title.
Lol OPEN button. And... cat-slamming a clown in a face. Whoah.
A nude sculpture of... *foams at the mouth and ends up on the floor convulsing* I need to wash my eyes...
Plot desu ka? Purotto desu ka? Purotto ga imasu ka? *bangs head on desk*
xxxyx chapter 12 . 9/10/2013
'"I like trains," Kerberos said. Then she was run over by one.' - so RANDOM! '...were sure to make more smart remarks...' - lol, problem, Duff? 'Butch yelled a bad word, which startled Kerberos and made her take out her megaphone and scream she liked trains.' XD '"GUNS 'N' ROSES!"' - oh, Lucas. 'Lucas's mouth was foaming.' Pffhahaha... '

'"Whoa..." I sighed. "And I thought I was awesome."
"Nobody else did."' - That remark deserves a savage elbow. XD

*groans* A what's up joke...

This chapter's humor at the beginning kinda gets me. Not sure why. :P
xxxyx chapter 11 . 9/10/2013
'Kerberos: (Background music.)' - lol. Good move, Duff. When your team is stupid, do the opposite that their brains tell them. What-the-wha? What's with the aways-weird cliffhanger? Now I don't know whether to feel suspenseful or...

Good luck with your wait for the 10,000th view!
xxxyx chapter 10 . 9/10/2013
'Much better than peeing on elevators!' - whoah, that's so ungirly! O.O
And... it's a trap? Well, at least the undead had the decency to wait until they finish.
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