Reviews for How to Survive a Zombie Apocalypse
xxxyx chapter 9 . 9/10/2013
Silence-breaking fart. Dang. '...Butch gave him a death punch that sent an expansive wave...' - woot! Go Butch! That ending remark... Oh Lucas.
xxxyx chapter 8 . 9/10/2013
'"OLD MCDONALD HAD A FARM, EAA EAA YOOO!"' - best line ever. Bugs bunny mask? Whoah creepy.
Anyway, maybe you need to put indicators to show who spoke what. Other than that, just enjoyable. Plus a bit of a creepy factor.
xxxyx chapter 7 . 9/10/2013
'their expressions reflecting their amazing brain capacity' - lol in a zombie apocalypse there are things scarier than zombies. '"You don't run with your butt. You run with your legs. Actually that would be kinda creepy to s-' - yeesh. And... dat nonsense-court. Best way to solve the problem of angry teammates. Ever. O-O

'"I feel like I'm in an absurd world made by a kid."' - whoa Butch, that's the smartest thing you could ever say.

And... that cheesy final line.
mjinx chapter 2 . 9/9/2013
Duff Obama, really?! Haha.

So we have a gay hippie, a reaper girl and choco hulk. I really adore the way you describe your characters.

And Duff joined the squad for pizza. Figures...

Anyway, good job for this chapter. It really keeps my short attention span from flying away.
mjinx chapter 1 . 9/9/2013
This is a good humor read. I like Duff and her funny narrative.

And lol at Justin Bieber. But hey, I'd probably do the same thing if he shows up in my neighborhood.

Good job for this. xD
xxxyx chapter 6 . 9/9/2013
MLP parachute. Yeesh. Reading this story, I wonder if the zombie apocalypse only killed people with common sense.
"MY NAME IS DUFF OBAMA."
"AND I AM A PIZZA TRANSFORMER." - Pfff..
'I shrieked like when I'd seen Bieber.' - XD
"WHAT ARE YOU, MY MAMA?"
"Thankfully not, Duff Obama." - Pfff squared.
Let's hope Lucas is one of those people with common sense...
xxxyx chapter 5 . 9/9/2013
That first line... I'm covering my eyes. And yeah, I noticed how you labeled every chapter 'braineating.' This story is eating my mind...
Duff is Murphy Law in action. The team is worse than the zombies.
Whoa. Never thought of Rule no. 7 before. :P
kingofe3 chapter 14 . 9/8/2013
We learned... there's a cure and some dude who has an anime character's name.

Oh, look another video. I think the date is odd, isn't the story current time or in 2013? I don't know...

Anyway, a rewrite is good if you want. I can't tell you how to change your story for the better since well it' your story. Seeing you come through the tourney, you can fix up any grammar you find (don't ask me since I'm a amateur).

If you got this far with amateur work (it's actually not), then with your current writing ability from the tourney, you'll go places. wb
Fan chapter 14 . 9/6/2013
Rewrite, but don't take away the awesomeness and all the crazy characters! HTSAZA wouldn't be the same without people that eat wood or dress like reapers T-T

(let's not forget a MC whose love for pizza surpasses heaven)
xxxyx chapter 4 . 9/6/2013
'Life is the movie Final Destination.' - wow, that's deep coming from this story. :P
'3. I won't bother to put anything here since option three's always stupid.' - lol so this one isn't? :P
'Butch butched again.' - pfft.

Lol crude humor. Not exactly my preference, but well, guess the crowd likes you.
xxxyx chapter 3 . 9/6/2013
Never eat burritos. Uh-huh, got it! :P
Cooking skills. They're nearly extinct among youngsters today, huh?
Lol, MJ at the end.
Hm, I wish for some sanity, though. That's how you develop characters, and most comedy has to have it, just like the boke-tsukkomi combination. :P I kinda have difficulty relating to any of the characters other than the protagonist. Oh yeah, they're idiots. XD
Vladvonbounce chapter 14 . 9/5/2013
I liked this chapter a lot more than the previous ones. it was still random but it felt like there was a real point to it. They might discover how to save the world!

As to whether you should re write. I have re written my own stuff so many times and I still often justn look at it and go this is rubbish it needs to be rewritten. There is always some way it can be imporved. The main point I think is will you enjoy re writing it? If you enjoy writing your own story then go for it and keep making it better and more awesome. If it just really drags and sucks then obviously don't bother. I think the wacky characters are good you just need to keep it on track slightly more and avoid some stereotypical references.
xxxyx chapter 2 . 9/4/2013
Yeesh, seeing men kissing was the worst of the three.
...and a beard. Pfffft.

Duff Obama. Randometer, overblown! XD
xxxyx chapter 1 . 9/4/2013
Lol Bieber. And that deodorant. o.O

That tip was useful. Great humor read.
Vladvonbounce chapter 13 . 9/3/2013
Could there be some sort of plot at the end? Maybe! :)

It is a bit weird that Collin keeps calling Duff miss. I don't think anyone could be that polite to someone being so rudely obnoxious constantly.
Pointing out that Collin is emo all the time I feel is a bit, I am not sure, wrong? It's like using nerd as an insult sort of thing.
Don't overdo the toilet humour. pretty much every chapter has some. It gets old. Also using words like discharge and twinkie, I felt could have been better chosen

At least Duff is finally admitting her own idiocy. Good on her. :)
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