Reviews for Lost
empires at my fingertips chapter 1 . 3/2/2012
I really liked the idea of death from a child's perspective. While it's not a completely original idea, it's rare to find it done as well as this piece. I liked the simplicity of your style which made it more poignant. But I think you would've done well to re-read your piece a little more closely, because I caught a grammatical error (sorry, habitual nitpicker!) and there's a lack of consistency in it - I mean, sometimes it's "mommy" and sometimes you write "Mommy."

I lovelovelove the bit when the child's talking about the mother's fake smile. It's just so realistic and it really sucked me in. Really awesome piece!

Keep writing :)