Reviews for Sandra Keating |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This is a very cute love story and a very sad one. I could feel that gentle heart in little Sandra. If I may be forward there are some grammar and spelling issues throughout the story. Some of the words are the wrong version or tense and there is a hefty amount of comma usage. For example: original My father was hospitalized due to a heart disease he have. I was eight then, and his father, Dr. Keating, coincidently was my father's doctor. My mom brought me every afternoon to the hospital to visit dad. Fate have perfectly planned our little love story— our innocent playful love for one another— from the very day we were born, we were already destined with each other. ... To give this a better flow you will need to have your words in the correct tense,re-arrange structure, and eliminate some of your commas. :D mmkay A possible re-written version When I was eight years old my father was hospitalized for his heart condition. Doctor Keating was our doctor and coincidentally the parent of my love. Fate had it perfectly planned out from our births the innocent affections that we would share. |