Reviews for Pickup Lines Don't Work As Well As Tetris Battles
RainbowBoy365 chapter 1 . 8/21/2020
Very interesting, I swear this is just research for when I write my cute and hilarious fics!
Zarica Vicen chapter 1 . 9/5/2016
That managed to be both dirty and adorble
Krimsyn chapter 1 . 10/23/2013
Very cute!
LateNightTurtle chapter 1 . 12/11/2012
Ahhh, awkward fluff and smut is always the greatest! :D Oh my god, and Lucas really is adorable. The things he says, just. . AWWW. :P
Guest chapter 1 . 12/10/2012
Ibbit chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
I can't imagine a twenty-five year old being like this. The story is cute and stuff but very odd/unrealistic. Maybe you were going for that a little and I'm being stupid by commenting on it, oh well. I do that. I think it's funny how I read this just a few days after the whole chick-fil-a shenanigans went on. Amusing timing. Anyways, keep writing and living and ll that jazz.
Lizray chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
This was incredibly cute! Great job.
Myzz' Munchii-Man chapter 1 . 6/30/2012
the cutest virgin ever. seriously
AlbinoApples chapter 1 . 6/4/2012
I usually shy away from one-shots, but this one was great! Lucas's character was absolutely adorable. Great job.
falling-into-fate chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
Oh my god. That was adorable!
Roza Sharis chapter 1 . 4/24/2012
aw, this was so cute. Don't know did you aim at that, but it get me like adorable :)
its-like-i-sed chapter 1 . 3/31/2012
Hi, this story was pretyy amusing :) and you have now got me addicted to tetris battles ;p xx
OnTheDottedLine chapter 1 . 3/12/2012
awwwwww that was so undeniably cute:)
xfffxfxfx chapter 1 . 3/11/2012
This is really sweet. And pretty funny too.

I still think you need to work on developing your characters. In this story, each one just seems like a gimmick – Lucas is ‘socially awkward rambler’ and Philip is ‘reasonably acceptable love interest guy’, and each character is not much more than that. If you really want to move readers, you can add depth and levels to the characters. Why is Lucas the way he is? What kind of life has he lived, being this way? How have his experiences changed him? And: why is Philip the way he is? What does he see in Lucas other than ‘cuteness’?

I fully believe you can answer these questions and incorporate them into the story while keeping the light and comedic tone. It doesn’t have to become a sad-fest just because people have pasts and things.
Gunning Twice chapter 1 . 3/6/2012
x3 So cute! And although rainfaery13 has something of a point there, it really shouldn't be enough to not read the whole thing and give it a chance, at the very least. :/
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