i find it funny you had janari say "drawn as moths to a flame", which implies there are moths in daemos or desmos whatever its called. I imagine there are little fires everywhere and pesky moths flying about. you can squish them but they always come back...

Love it :)

Love it so good

Love it

love it :)

love it :)

I just wanna that after reading your story today I am blown away by how great this is yet honestly disappointed and a bit pissed that this story will never be continued and I'm not sure if you're still checking for reviews but please if you're not gonna continue this then at least put it up for adoption

I somehow found myself desperately searching for this story. I don't know what happened, just that suddenly I remembered this particular story and just had to read it again. I didn't even remember the name, good thing google could help even with my vague memories. It was a few years ago that I found this story, it was already discontinued then though. Back then I was so very weirded out, still new but kinda liking these kind of things, heh.
I've enjoyed it then, more so now. I came to appreciate it more. Very well written, it leaves a deep impression. I don't know how to express my feelings over it. Its good, great, no, its more than that. I love this story that's for sure, and was deeply devastated to know that its to never continue. Yet, thank you for not taking it down. I suppose it is life's tendency to keep us busy, free time gets more scarce by the day and even I gambled away my time reading this.
Ah I should catch up now, so much more to do. I don't regret using my time to read this again. It was great. It brought me along a journey, one that I will remember till times to come, and leave me either giggling or smirking once more. Both of you really made a good story and I've enjoyed it so. Thank you and Good luck

Good, fun story.

I liked where it was headed. This had the potential to be 500k words with the twins and their possible futures. And I was totally hoping Trystan would get triple knocked up with the little girl he was promising Veylic. I could totally see her being powerfully strong, wonderful, daddy's little princess and the ultimate diplomat between her siblings. I knew this was unfinished before I started but I secretly hoped she'd make an appearance before the end. It was not meant to be, but I did hope anyway.

The polygamy was a tough pill to swallow for me, but I get it. He's a god. He's lived for like a gazillion years and has Quadrillions of children. Buuuuuuut, it was still hard to watch Trystan's pain. I get it. I'm right there with him.

This story had just oodles of potential. I'm happy to have read it even unfinished. Totally worth it.

Thanks for sharing your story.

You should put a line or something between different scenes. One second we're reading about Trystan, and then it switches to Veylic with no scene-breaks in-between to warn us. It's very disorienting.

this makes me cry...

Awww, I'm so sad! Your writing is so great. I hope that you and your friend are able to get back into contact. I would love to read more of your work. I've been hooked since the start. You've got me addicted now! I hope that everything works out for the best but if you don't get a chance to continue then I just want to say thank you for such a great, original, imaginative, and interesting story.

I'm so bummed the story has to end here. I was really looking forward to the twins being born and what becomes of veylic and tryston. I'm just so curious to what you planned the stories ending to be too. If it's not too much to ask, since your not going finish it (which I can respect since Im a writer of unfinished work) can you pm me what happens? i just don't want to deal with feeling unfulfilled and never finding out what happens

I almost cried but yeah he's "home "

More please?