Great cliffhanger at the end, I love how you're writing it in the present tense. Keep up the good work!

Nicely written. I really like your description of Ted. It makes his character almost jump out of the words.

Keep it up (:

You write really well (: There's a small typo though. I think you meant to say 'go for it' instead of 'got for it'. So far it is really interesting.

Keep it up! I look forward to your next chapters!